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Circus of Humorous & Humiliating Arguments Part 1: OBD 2027 prologue edition

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Yeah that's the best way you can say that.
The man is like a VS. Debator more than a story-teller and it shows badly in terms of actually trying to explain how it's happening or how it leads into that situation at all. It doesn't help that his details are focused wrong and thus it really comes off too heavy-handed and thus nothing clicks.
And I say this as someone who goes out of his way for VS. Debates and usually reads things 2-3 times in a row.

... You do know that doesn't endear anyone to Kamachi's writing right? That sounds like a Suggs level retort.

He's presenting Kamachi's writing flaws and has done it before. It's the same deal with me as I've also pointed out Nasu's biggest set of flaws is that he will invent a new wording or phrase out of his ass and only explain it later(Sometimes he explains it in the same scene he presents it but for those who don't have that backing... it can through them for a loop). Examples are:

Textures
X-Planetary Class
Human Order
12 Conceptual Pillars
Quantum Time Lock

I can easily have all day pointing out shit like this and people would agree. But if I was to instead put it like this:

Layered Worlds
Power Levels for Beings outside of the scope of Man
How Humans see Reality
The Greek Gods in their True Bodies
A Checkpoint at a certain point in Time

It suddenly makes more sense doesn't it
 
Okay, then that's Kamachi's fault. Also, Kamachi's writing isn't so obtuse. He does explain shit. You're just purposely making it obtuse as hell.

No, I'm looking through your feats thread and it's an issue of Kamachi's

Do we need this long-winded explanation of how Touma lost his memory? Really? Especially the "which parts are affected and not" deal? Shirou lost his memory when the Fuyuki Fire happened and we just got "He lost his memory of what happened before", we didn't get that he still new certain stuff or what part of his brain still works.
 

Mr.OMG

Paramount
Okay, then that's Kamachi's fault. Also, Kamachi's writing isn't so obtuse. He does explain shit. You're just purposely making it obtuse as hell.
It is not Kamachi's fault, Kabbala is so complex that its individual elements are more complex than all the Cthulhu Mythos put together, he cannot just explain Kabbala, otherwise Kamachi would spend thousands and thousands of pages explaining the terms alone. So the best he can do is to give sketchy explanations or references for those in the know.
 

Then I'm not even sure why he tried that? Not even the fuckers who write SMT literally try shit like that and they include shit from even more ridiculous myths and religions.

Just simplify it to your series or just don't bother man.
 

Cryso Agori

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I mean I agree that it's long-winded but it isn't as inunderstandable as that copypasta OMG just posted.


Is it really? I mean you don't really need to understand the real-life Kabbalah to understand what Kamachi means when he says how it dictates how high a level a magician can go. Stiyl in Volume 2 explained that adequately.
 

Cryso Agori

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Then I'm not even sure why he tried that? Not even the fuckers who write SMT literally try shit like that and they include shit from even more ridiculous myths and religions.

Just simplify it to your series or just don't bother man.
This I can actually explain.

This is the afterword of volume 1. Kamachi literally states that Toaru came out of personal interest than something to actually market.

 

Mr.OMG

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As strange as it may sound, he is a writer, not a Vs debator. Otherwise ToAru would have turned into a graphomaniac long ago, Kamachi puts plot above all else, if ToAru were just a "book for the sake of hax", that is, like the Saggs-verse, then I wouldn't read it.
Then I'm not even sure why he tried that? Not even the fuckers who write SMT literally try shit like that and they include shit from even more ridiculous myths and religions.

Just simplify it to your series or just don't bother man.
Well he simplifies it, as I said he gives scrappy explanations for ordinary readers and that is enough, ordinary people don't care about Kabbalah and only we Vs Debator are looking for more detailed explanations that he can't give.
 
I mean I agree that it's long-winded but it isn't as inunderstandable as that copypasta OMG just posted.

Again, that wasn't the point I was going on with and I primarily ignored that myself for the sake of posterity.
I'm just saying that I have always seen Kamachi's issue is that he can be... long winded at times for the wrong reasons and really fail to clarify a scene that should be clarified on the spot.
Thus you end up with massive confusion or wasting the readers' time when you can easily go explore something else. Again, here's another example here you put up for the latter problem.


Like does Kamachi actually explain before or after this what is REALLY the major difference between a Level 3 Teleporting Esper or a Level 4 Teleporting Esper in this scene? Because otherwise, it feels weird of why a Level 4 or 5 Teleporting Esper can enter... but not a Level 3 or theoretically a Number 2 Esper?

This isn't me shitting on Kamachi by any means I have heard he does clarify it somewhat later on with a battle between 2 of them but I want to ask because again, I feel other authors would make this difference very apparent for this scene to be actually effective.
 
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I'll be that rare guy and admit... I actually like Gremmy... but I'll also be that typical guy and admit Gremmy gets his ass murdered by everyone here because he's that shit with his powers...
Even Satsuki and Fujino would kill him.
 

Masterblack06

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HST gets absolutely fucking clapped


Play card games on motorcycles so hard you collapse a star, cause a supernova, and then make it turn into a black hole
 

Paxton

One Sin and Hundreds of Good Deeds
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The Windowless Building part is probably due to the weird properties of the space inside (non-Euclidean geometry and all that), and a level 2-3 Esper wouldn't be able to perform the necessary calculations to get inside without telefragging themselves and at that level I don't even think they can do that in general, let alone get into the Windowless Building specifically where the space is all "funky", for lack of a better word.
 

Yeah I can get that but I'm saying was it explained in that page of where they explained it? Because it would feel weird to put that there and yet not explain the difference right there by having a character explain it.
It's like how in Fate/Stay Night, Shirou and Rin explicitly talk about Noble Phantasms only for Shirou to immediately say how strong they are even in comparison of a Servant's strength of the same Rank and Rin tells him he's right and go for a demonstration.

Like if it was explained elsewhere, it would feel weird when the timing itself would benefit then and there, get what I mean?
 
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